The Azzai and Azzan and Axar - Updated!
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The Azzai and Azzan and Axar - Updated!
Updated version:
It should be a lot clearer and more elaborate!
Old Version (not at all fun to read):
New Quest Series!?
Yep, if you haven’t read the last paragraph… But, let’s leave it like that for now…
It should be a lot clearer and more elaborate!

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Old Version (not at all fun to read):
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New Quest Series!?

Yep, if you haven’t read the last paragraph… But, let’s leave it like that for now…
Last edited by Dragon78114 on Sat Nov 21, 2009 7:09 am; edited 11 times in total (Reason for editing : To update the info! :D and typos -.-)

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Re: The Azzai and Azzan and Axar - Updated!
The system if belief is centered around the Azzai- a god who has created the world out of the torment of his wife, Tyre (pronounced tEE - rAH), who was killed because she was deemed infertile and produced the evils of the world by Hector, Azzai’s enemy, who was later killed by Azzai. Azzai then created the greater parts of the world using what Tyre and Hector left behind- an unfinished world of misery and despair.
That bit went straight over my head.

...the 1st Year in the Fifth Age... ...inspired by temple burning in 1st Year in the Fourth Age...
Are those dates suppose to be the same?
...converted into atheists...
Bad choice of words, in my opinion. People are born innocent culture and the burden of religion - you are converted to something, not back into the neutral zone. "With half the town coaxed from Azzai..."
...8th of Octuber
Did you mean Septober or Raktuber? Or did you misspell October? In which case, October doesn't exist in RuneScape.

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Re: The Azzai and Azzan and Axar - Updated!
yeah for dates go here
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alright, I'll change them

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whoops... didn't mean to do that
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the paragraph you highlighted I worded strangely- I'll re-write it to make it more clear...
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the paragraph you highlighted I worded strangely- I'll re-write it to make it more clear...

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Re: The Azzai and Azzan and Axar - Updated!
I basically rewrote all of the information regarding Axar and Azzan, so now it should be HELL of a lot more clearer and more informative. 


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Re: The Azzai and Azzan and Axar - Updated!
Ok... a few things...
1) read the whole thing to yourself out-loud, there are several big grammatical errors.
2) the whole Axar thing is really unclear...and you said Jain was killed twice?
1) read the whole thing to yourself out-loud, there are several big grammatical errors.
2) the whole Axar thing is really unclear...and you said Jain was killed twice?
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Dark Avorian wrote:Ok... a few things...
1) read the whole thing to yourself out-loud, there are several big grammatical errors.
2) the whole Axar thing is really unclear...and you said Jain was killed twice?
1. damn it! >.< I absolutely suck at correcting my own ****. I read it over like three times and there is still errors... it might have to do with the transfer from the word document to here, whaterver, I'll read it once more.
2. I did? I'll correct it when I re-read as you said I should... >.>
EDIT: You were right, I must have been real tired last night.... lol now it should be much easier to read.... haha...

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