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Post by blank Thu Jan 13, 2011 2:39 am

I've started writing on a book. In dutch. Translation on here, ask me if you want the original version. I've got like 7 pages so far, and that's all I'll be telling you, 'cuz I'm sick and tired of having to make elaborate descriptions, so here's a nutshell:

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The book:

Prologue

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Chapter I: New Neighbours

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Part II:

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Part III:

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Part IV:
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Part V:

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Post by Blaze FF8 Thu Jan 13, 2011 4:13 am

I had a read at the prologue there. Really good, I like your writing style. Smile
The story stirs straight from the get-go, and that's essential when captivating a reader. Keep it up!
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Post by blank Thu Jan 13, 2011 4:23 am

Thanks Grin I'll give some background info eventually, but I just cba right now :p

Though, how do you mean stirs straight from the get-go?
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Post by Duskcurse Thu Jan 13, 2011 5:37 am

Nice Jer, the prologue is really good Grin , where did you got the inspiration to writte this
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Post by Blaze FF8 Thu Jan 13, 2011 5:42 am

I mean that there's tension and drama right from the beginning. That's good when grabbing a potential reader's attention. Smile
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Post by blank Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:22 am

Dusk -

Thanks ^^ I won't tell you anything about my inspiration, because I believe inspiration is what makes an artist different. Telling people what it is takes away from the magic of a book.

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Ah, like that ^^ Well, I wasn't sure how to start it, so I decided to use the bullying scene I wanted for the end in the beginning. I've decided on making this story a very special one, since it will be the first thing I've ever hoped to publish. I won't spoil anything for you, but the monstrous person mentioned in part IV is closer than you think...
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Post by Duskcurse Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:37 am

I will read the rest soon, keep the good job Jer ^^
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Post by Ruy112 Thu Jan 13, 2011 5:04 pm

Read the prologue, damn you capture the feeling of panic well, that part is really well written...
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Post by The Empty Lord Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:40 pm

Prologue's very well written. Smile
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Post by blank Fri Jan 14, 2011 4:38 am

Thanks Grin It's the part in which I've put the most effort so far, as it is the first impression after all.
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Post by blank Sat Jan 15, 2011 9:34 am

Update coming soon
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Post by blank Tue Jan 25, 2011 7:50 am

-yawns- Writing is poison... I can't even concentrate on gaming anymore <3
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Post by MorbiusMonster Tue Jan 25, 2011 8:17 am

Now you know how I feel.
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Post by blank Tue Jan 25, 2011 8:21 am

-hugs Morb- 's all good <3
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Post by blank Fri Feb 04, 2011 8:48 am

Useless posts are ftw
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